Exemplar · Written Evaluation

Sample Evaluation — Team Bradfield

Annotated 450-word evaluation · Part C reference · Yellow boxes show what makes it A-band

How to use this exemplar: read the 4-paragraph evaluation below. Each paragraph has a yellow annotation box explaining why that paragraph earns marks. Don't copy the content — copy the STRUCTURE and the TYPE of evidence.

Test Data (pasted from the build journal)

Load addedObservationPhoto
0 gEmpty bucket hanging. Bridge straight, no deflection.📷 L20-01.jpg
250 gVery slight deflection visible on deck centre (~1 mm). No sounds.📷 L20-02.jpg
500 gDeflection ~3 mm. No creaks.📷 L20-03.jpg
750 gSmall creak from rear truss. Deck slightly twisted. Bridge still holding.📷 L20-04.jpg
987 gFAILURE. Centre vertical on rear truss buckled sideways. Bridge collapsed.📷 L20-05.jpg

Written Evaluation (450 words)

Paragraph 1 — What worked

Our bridge performed well overall, holding 987 g on a total mass of 124 g — a load-to-mass ratio of 7.96 which exceeded our design target of 7.0. The triangulation on our front truss performed especially well; inspecting the photo at 750 g (L20-04.jpg), every diagonal on the front truss remained perfectly straight under load, showing that our Pratt diagonals successfully transferred tension to the bottom chord as predicted. The X-bracing we added at the centre two panels (Idea 3 from our folio) also held firm — no X-brace member deformed at any load. These elements confirmed our research from Source 6 (PopsicleBridges.com), which recommended X-bracing at the highest-stress centre panels.

112 words
Why this paragraph is strong: cites specific numbers (987 g, 124 g, ratio 7.96), specific evidence (photo L20-04), specific members (front-truss diagonals, centre-panel X-bracing), and links back to a specific research source (Source 6). These are all signals the rubric rewards: "Evaluation cites specific members, photos and forces."

Paragraph 2 — What failed

Failure began at the centre vertical of the rear truss when the hanging load reached 987 g. In the L20-05.jpg photo, this member is clearly visible bent sideways at about its midpoint, with one end pulled away from the bottom chord joint. The failure was sudden — within about one second of adding the final 250 g increment. Before failure we heard a small creak at 750 g (L20-04 captures this moment), which in hindsight was the first sign the vertical was beginning to deform. The front truss and the deck remained intact even after the rear truss buckled; the bridge as a whole only collapsed because the load became unsupported.

117 words
Why this paragraph is strong: pinpoints the exact location of first failure (centre vertical, rear truss), describes the failure mode with a clear visual reference (bent at midpoint), and shows causal thinking ("bridge collapsed because rear truss lost support"). Notice the evaluation uses "in hindsight" — that's the kind of reflective language that shows engineering maturity.

Paragraph 3 — Why it failed

The centre vertical was in compression when under load, as expected for a Pratt truss. Its failure was a compression buckle rather than a pure compression crush — the member was long and thin (60 mm tall by only ~2 mm thick), and at a critical load it bent sideways rather than simply shortening. This is a classic slenderness problem: Euler buckling is proportional to the cube of the thickness (depth), so thin vertical members are extremely vulnerable. The X-bracing we added helped the centre two PANELS but did not directly reinforce the centre VERTICAL itself. The rear truss failed before the front truss because during our build (photo L14), we noticed the rear truss had one slightly thinner vertical, and we did not replace it.

124 words
Why this paragraph is strong: uses engineering vocabulary correctly (compression buckle, slenderness, Euler buckling, member, panel vs vertical). Explains failure mechanism with a physical rule ("stiffness ∝ depth³"). Admits a build-time mistake — the rear truss had a known weak vertical. Honesty about decisions under pressure is exactly the engineering habit teachers want to see.

Paragraph 4 — One specific improvement

In a version 2 bridge, we would laminate the centre vertical into a double-thickness member (two sticks glued side-by-side with PVA, 24-hour cure). This roughly doubles the depth of the vertical, which by Euler buckling roughly 8× its bending stiffness. Based on our failure load of 987 g and the slenderness of the current vertical, we estimate version 2 could carry an additional 200-300 g before the new weakest point (probably the adjacent rectangles) failed. The cost is modest: 2 extra sticks and 20 minutes of cure time. We would also ensure both trusses use identically-thick sticks before gluing — matching our materials to our design more carefully. These two changes together should move our load-to-mass ratio from 7.96 toward a target of 9.5.

127 words · TOTAL 480 words
Why this paragraph is strong: the improvement is specific (laminate the centre vertical — not just "make it stronger"), quantified (8× bending stiffness, +200-300 g), costed (2 extra sticks, 20 min cure), and targeted (new ratio 9.5). Most Y7 students write "we would make it thicker". A-band students say WHICH member, by HOW MUCH, expecting WHAT result.

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